Bitch Manifesto-Autobiography
...@ work today and from since the time I started this job, I had to put up with the challenges of being a bitch. I have been reading The Bitch Manifesto and have come to the terms that that is what I am. I may not be ugly and have the same qualities as the Physical section in the Manifesto but I do live by the slogan, ‘Bitch is Beautiful’! I affirm, re-claim what I am which is a Bitch.
What makes me a Bitch? I am empowering, hard-headed and stubborn! I can give someone in their suit an eye that could strike them dead. Women look at me with fear and look somewhat like children near me. Yet, I feel like this...
Sometimes I wonder if people realise that I am a bitch. If when I get my coffee in the kitchen, I ‘smell’ like a Bitch. If when I go to scan papers that I should scan one saying, I am a Bitch so everyone knows for certain. If when I turn away from speaking to my boss, he says, ‘Boy is she a Bitch?’ I do want to embrace the Bitch that I am but being in this environment where they can judge me makes me awkward. I note to myself that these people haven’t even met the Superbitches that I know. And boy am I glad!
Am I as confident as the Bitch Manifesto considers the best Bitches to be? Am I as aggressive, independent and ambitious as I can be? I seem to battle with myself in these four walls in my cubicle. Outside, I my Bitch’s Bitch but here I feel like am dwindling with the non-bitches of the world.
Commentary
I chose to use rhetorical questions in the last paragraph to make the readers understand that at work she questions her true Bitch as she’s challenged by the environment. I used a lot of repetition of the pronoun, I, just to re-enforce that the article is about the woman in question. The effect of that was to make her seem very selfish and pompous. I changed the tone/vybe of the speaker from being very sure of her self to unsure to show the effect of how work has made her. I used the @symbol to give the speaker a casual beginning to their autobiography. The small case in the compound word, non-bitches, was used to emphasis that these people were inferior to her in particular. I used a lot of references and key words from the actual Bitch Manifesto in order for the two to relate and make known the ‘seriousness’ of it.
WWW
ReplyDelete- Direct references to the source material (The Bitch Manifesto)
- Good use of literary techniques such as rhetorical questions etc
- Good use of descriptive writing skills, written like a Novel
EBI
- Could be longer
Mark
- 21/25
Bold and confident writing with some minor technical flaws. You use the source material well and it infuses what you are doing. There is some originality in your approach and also a modern take with the use of typographical abbreviation. In fact there is an argument that this could have been used more as a deliberate stylistic choice. Convincing and sustained.
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WWW- Loved it!;)
ReplyDeleteGood in depth description producing strong imagery.
Referenced to The Bitch manifesto creating a 'come back' like article on your own views. Used alot of language techniques.
EBI- Conclusion could have been extended to make a solid ending to the topic.
Band 4
20/25
WWW: I loved the use of rhetorical questions. This clearly conveyed her uncertainty about being a 'true bitch'. Theres good use of language. Also I liked the use of '@' to give the autobiography a more of a personal feel.
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EBI: it was longer and slightly more detailed.
www: confident adaptation. Included rhetorical questions which showed the character clearly and descriptive.
ReplyDeleteebi: could have been a bit longer
Mark: 20/25
17/25
ReplyDeleteHaven't read it yeeet but just wanted to say HEEEEEEEEEEEEYYYYYYYYYYY CHERVAUGGGGGGGGGGHHHHHHHHHNNNNNNNNNN!!!! =D
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